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I am glad to inform you that my fourteen-year-old son, Michael Mboudjeka, has just published a novel title "The Autumn Things Went Crazy." You  can see  it here.

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Sep 9, 2016 5:34 AM fourquadrant    says:

i will definately review it

Sep 9, 2016 9:02 AM Seal    says:

Your synopsis has a few problems.

#1 The sentence indicating how the parents died. A lightening strike would be a better description than "from a thunder storm" Did the sound of thunder frighten them to death?

#2 You give away the whole story and leave nothing for your prospective readers to wonder about so why buy the book. Distill the synopsis to 1 or 2 sentences - 3 at the very most and end it with a question.

 

e.g. Rico, a young 14 year old boy, lost his parents when they were struck by lightening and is now living with his best friend [insert name], a ghoul intent on drawing Rico away from his Christian faith. Can Rico withstand the ever increasing peer pressure when drawn into a love triangle or will he lose his soul to lwhatever]?

 

See what I mean?

 

Seal

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Dec 31, 2017 7:24 AM RuchiG    says in response to Seal:

Nice One. I also noticed that but not agrre with second one.

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Ruchi G.

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